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Luigi[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because the previous peer review was over four years ago, and I'd like to improve this article to at least good status.

Thanks, Nathan2055 ^talk 16:50, 25 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Okay here's some points I see:
lead: missing info on the other media appearances of Luigi
concept and creation: Of the pallete swap image and the L image, one should be moved. It squeezes the text in there making if difficult to read on smaller screens.; "In accordance with Nintendo's marketing policy of naming and promoting individual characters" - what is that policy? If you can't explain, then there is no reason for that statement.; "In 1988, consequently, a version of Yume Kōjō: Doki Doki Panic" - should be a new paragraph here.
Actor Portrayal: Missing info on the Super Mario Bros. movie actor portrayal. It's mentioned near the bottom, but it should be mentioned here as it is an actor portrayal of Luigi. More in-depth info can be placed in that latter section.
Appearances: There are a lot of missing citations. I marked a few and others have already been marked.; There is also appears to be original research in this section. I've marked one instance (claiming a game is the only one like that would be OR unless you can find a reliable secondary source to back that up).
Reception: Considering the size of the article, the reception section is quite small. As it currently stands too much emphasis is placed on the appearances vs. reception. Even the concept and creation is quite large by comparison. The lack of reception or real-world impact is likely to make it difficult to justify it having a separate article.陣内 _Jinnai 15:45, 4 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"Characteristics" needs to be completely rewritten using good sources and no original research. Also, it could probably be a subsection of "Concept and creation" so it would draw less attention to itself. "Appearances" could use expansion/cleanup. In games where Luigi is prominent and not just a random cameo, then it should tell a bit about what he does in the game, and a bit of the general plot. "Reception" needs expansion. For a character as big as Luigi, there must be more then 3 sources of reception out there. _Blake ^{(Talk·Edits)} 16:17, 4 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks everyone. Time to get to work! --Nathan2055 ^talk^-^review 00:43, 9 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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